I like it as is. The voice feels true. I love the little things that make a person’s speech unique, and this example captures that beautifully. It follows its own rules of grammar, informed by a lifetime of experiences, which to me makes it even more correct than if it were to follow someone else’s rules. It’s interesting to think about how much personality has been lost to the standardization of languages. Cheering you both on, Writer and Editor. I can’t wait to read this book!
Go ahead and change it. For cases where the adjustment would cause the spirit of the sentence to change and the nuance and intent (of grams voice) to be missed - leave it be
Thanks George, this is sorta what I was thinking too. While this example doesn't change the *spirit* of the sentence too much, I'm also wondering to what extent it helps you hear her voice while reading... And whether that's an enhancement of the experience.
I like it as is. The voice feels true. I love the little things that make a person’s speech unique, and this example captures that beautifully. It follows its own rules of grammar, informed by a lifetime of experiences, which to me makes it even more correct than if it were to follow someone else’s rules. It’s interesting to think about how much personality has been lost to the standardization of languages. Cheering you both on, Writer and Editor. I can’t wait to read this book!
Go ahead and change it. For cases where the adjustment would cause the spirit of the sentence to change and the nuance and intent (of grams voice) to be missed - leave it be
Thanks George, this is sorta what I was thinking too. While this example doesn't change the *spirit* of the sentence too much, I'm also wondering to what extent it helps you hear her voice while reading... And whether that's an enhancement of the experience.